"See Naples and Die": A Short Story

View previous topic View next topic Go down

"See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Robert Frazer on Tue 24 Feb 2009 - 21:15

Salutations, one and all. I know that I\'m a little late to the party here - I\'ve only recently been introduced to Gunslinger Girl - but you can rest assured that I\'m a convert! The series is utterly superb and I can\'t sing its praises highly enough - so much so, in fact, that I\'ve been writing a fanfiction instead of researching for a crucial midterm... just whistlin'

To facilitate more convenient reading, I\'ve uploaded the story to Fanfiction.net:

Gunslinger Girl: See Naples and Die

The full text runs to around 13,000 words over three chapters. In matters of timeline it\'s set after Vol. 10, which is as far as the scanlations that I\'ve been able to find run (don\'t worry, I own legitimate copies of Vols. 1-6, but with ADV Manga being pretty much moribund nowadays I despair of ever seeing Vols. 7 and up officially).

The story also references a number of specific landmarks in Naples - I\'ve included links to pictures of them below, to facilitate visualisation:

------------------------
------------------------

Domenichino\'s fresco: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:A...M%26Gennaro.jpg

Mount Vesuvius: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:ViewofNaplesBay.jpg

Villa Floridiana: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DS4erY7vZjU

Spanish Quarter: http://www.flickr.com/photos/sipitaly/3188110287/

Duomo di San Gennaro: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Duomo_di_Napoli_(facciata).jpg

Piazza del Plebiscito: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Piazza_del_Plebiscito

Borgo Mariano alleyway: http://www.napolia.it/napoliborgomarinarogk.jpg

Borgo Mariano marina:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Castel_dell-Ovo.JPG

Bersagliera: http://www.labersagliera.it/Immagini/cartolinabig.gif


------------------------
------------------------

Anyway, enjoy! Comments and criticism, both positive and negative, are of course always appreciated.


Last edited by Robert Frazer on Tue 24 Feb 2009 - 21:32; edited 3 times in total
avatar
Robert Frazer

Male

Forum Posts : 1156

Location : The Green and Pleasant Land

Registration date : 2009-02-24

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by ElfenMagix on Tue 24 Feb 2009 - 21:21

Looks promising... Very Happy

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


If Fernando had Super Powers, He would be God!
avatar
ElfenMagix

Male

Forum Posts : 5667

Location : NYC NY, USA

Fan of : Pia, Elsa, Cleas, Triela...

Original Characters : Fernando & Rachel, Felix & Francesca

Comments : He has super powers. He is God.

Registration date : 2007-09-21

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Kiskaloo on Tue 24 Feb 2009 - 22:16

Reading stuff of this quality honestly makes me question why I bother. sweat

Seriously, exceptional work.

Spoiler:
Just wish it didn't have to be Maria. Cry

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


What? I like donuts! - Betty Suarez
If I die before my time, go on Oprah and tell the world 'I liked kittens'. - Veronica Mars
Scissors of victory! - Yui Hirasawa
avatar
Kiskaloo
A Cat of Many Talents

Male

Forum Posts : 10889

Location : Seattle / Tokyo / Milan

Fan of : Angelica's Smile

Original Characters : Kara Michelle

Comments : The community's international man of mystery.

Registration date : 2008-09-11

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by emperor on Wed 25 Feb 2009 - 4:40

A nice introductory tale.

Waiting for more contributions from you!

Cheers!

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


http://on.fb.me/9tuZOK Facebook Page for Cyborg Central : Gunslinger Girl Forum cheers
avatar
emperor

Male

Forum Posts : 1637

Location : Bangkok,Thailand

Fan of : Henrietta,Black Lagoon,Jormungund

Original Characters : Rosetta,Devil baby

Comments : Be creative,baby!!

Registration date : 2007-09-09
Your character
OC genger:

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Secchan on Wed 25 Feb 2009 - 23:07

Brilliant, and tear-jerking
avatar
Secchan

Female

Forum Posts : 125

Location : New Zealand

Fan of : Yuri

Registration date : 2009-02-21

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Robert Frazer on Fri 27 Feb 2009 - 9:14

Thanks for the comments so far, everyone. I'm much gratified by your praise, but don't be afraid to make criticisms; I don't want to put in substandard work after all!

This is just a note to say that I've uploaded a new version of the story to DeviantArt - the text is entirely identiical to the fanfiction.net one, but with this I've been able to put the location references actually on the page itself so it may make reading more convenient.

Linkage.

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


PASSION LIVES HERE
************
Prose Stories
avatar
Robert Frazer

Male

Forum Posts : 1156

Location : The Green and Pleasant Land

Registration date : 2009-02-24

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by emperor on Sat 28 Feb 2009 - 8:34

It just pop-up in my head about this story title.

You were inspired from a scene where Rico and Jean help that Accountist in Naple,did you?

cheers

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


http://on.fb.me/9tuZOK Facebook Page for Cyborg Central : Gunslinger Girl Forum cheers
avatar
emperor

Male

Forum Posts : 1637

Location : Bangkok,Thailand

Fan of : Henrietta,Black Lagoon,Jormungund

Original Characters : Rosetta,Devil baby

Comments : Be creative,baby!!

Registration date : 2007-09-09
Your character
OC genger:

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Robert Frazer on Sat 28 Feb 2009 - 10:18

I see the link, emperor (although in that chapter they were in Florence rather than Naples), but the specific title is an established saying already and it's also an ironic reflection on when we first meet Mario Bossi. The anime improved on the manga in several places, and this was one of them - when Mario is captured by the Camorra after escaping from Triela in the toilets, in the manga he just says that "some scary dudes are gonna be here" before Triela rescues him, whereas in the anime he makes the much more characterful reference to "See Naples and die" before the Camorra heavies are all gunned down by our golden-tressed cyborg. Mario returned to Italy with the hope of starting his life over again, but grim reality isn't going to let that happen.

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


PASSION LIVES HERE
************
Prose Stories
avatar
Robert Frazer

Male

Forum Posts : 1156

Location : The Green and Pleasant Land

Registration date : 2009-02-24

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by emperor on Sun 1 Mar 2009 - 9:03

Florence....ah!

Now I understood what your title mean.

Thanks anyway!!

Good

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


http://on.fb.me/9tuZOK Facebook Page for Cyborg Central : Gunslinger Girl Forum cheers
avatar
emperor

Male

Forum Posts : 1637

Location : Bangkok,Thailand

Fan of : Henrietta,Black Lagoon,Jormungund

Original Characters : Rosetta,Devil baby

Comments : Be creative,baby!!

Registration date : 2007-09-09
Your character
OC genger:

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by sasahara17 on Thu 2 Jul 2009 - 6:24

Took me awhile to get around to this, but damn.. this was one hell of a fic. Looks like you can't escape the Camorra after all.

Agapita and Mario... damn.

You should get a medal for writing this man, you really should.

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


Who is that hot glasses wearing babe I wonder...
avatar
sasahara17

Male

Forum Posts : 1001

Fan of : GSGs? Claes-sama and Elsa-chan. Outside that? Bloodhound Jr. and Saber

Original Characters : Wilfred Sheppard, I-CARE agent.

Comments : A walking idea powerhouse.

Registration date : 2007-11-09

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Professor Voodoo on Fri 13 Nov 2009 - 20:14

Really, really excellent...I'm floored by the opening sequence about Mario's childhood.

I also find the part at the end, about Agapita observing Catholic Mass, intriuging. Religion is a plot device that's hinted at in the canon but never really comes up. I'm curious to see where you're going with that.


Last edited by Professor Voodoo on Fri 13 Nov 2009 - 20:15; edited 1 time in total (Reason for editing : punctuation)
avatar
Professor Voodoo

Male

Forum Posts : 3422

Location : Hudson Valley, New York

Fan of : That one guy who was only in one episode & didn't have any lines.

Original Characters : Marisa/ Elio Alboreto

Comments :

Registration date : 2009-11-10

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Robert Frazer on Sat 21 Nov 2009 - 0:41

Whoops! Sorry for taking so long to respond, Professor Voodoo - I'm afraid that I missed your comment completely! ^^;

Anyway, thanks for your praise. As for the issue of religion I'm surprised that it hasn't come up more before now - it's Italy, even the non-religious are practically marinaded in Catholicism. The SWA has a disused monastery in its grounds! As well as the Agency mausoleum it probably helps with maintaining public cover - "why is a medical quango sited on former military land?" / "there was monastic land here too - swords into ploughshares, and all that.". It's a big part of life there and I don't think that it can realistically be boxed away into the occasional establishing panel of a grand duomo.

As for A&A themselves, they're practising partially for the simple gimmicky reason that it gives them a character distinction which I don't think any fratello, official or fanmade, has picked up on before. I'm also Catholic myself, and because a lot of my writing before now has been spacey sci-fi well removed from humble old Earth it's nice to have an opportunity to express it directly. It isn't just a matter of my own vanity, though - a few months back I sat down and had a long, long think about God and war and its implications for conscience, and this is a way of working it out - a few of the conclusions I came to will be emergent over the next set of stories, once I have a chance to write them.

Also, I like the idea of a big action scene in Monte Cassino at some point in the future. Wink

Thanks for your interest!

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


PASSION LIVES HERE
************
Prose Stories
avatar
Robert Frazer

Male

Forum Posts : 1156

Location : The Green and Pleasant Land

Registration date : 2009-02-24

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Professor Voodoo on Sat 21 Nov 2009 - 20:03

As I said I like the idea. I'm also touching on religion in my stories, but from an opposite direction. My Marisa character has a serious chip on her shoulder about Catholic Christianity, particularly nuns. This is because of her faint "memory shadows" of her former life, when she was abused in an orphanage in Dublin. I hope you're not insulted by my somewhat negative presentation of the faith...there will be positive Catholic characters as well.

The idea of a mass action scene at the Abbey of Monte Cassino sounds great, I look forward to it. Perhaps you could tie in a flashback to Grandpa Croce the WWII resistance fighter?
avatar
Professor Voodoo

Male

Forum Posts : 3422

Location : Hudson Valley, New York

Fan of : That one guy who was only in one episode & didn't have any lines.

Original Characters : Marisa/ Elio Alboreto

Comments :

Registration date : 2009-11-10

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Robert Frazer on Sat 21 Nov 2009 - 20:40

This is because of her faint "memory shadows" of her former life, when she was abused in an orphanage in Dublin. I hope you're not insulted by my somewhat negative presentation of the faith...

Don't worry about it, no problems at all - go right ahead. I've no desire to muzzle people, I'm thick-skinned enough to take a hit without having a tantrum, and I'm not so neurotic that I can't distinguish fiction and drama from the world around me! Besides, Catholics are used to being the baddies, it's like British villains in American cinema .

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------


PASSION LIVES HERE
************
Prose Stories
avatar
Robert Frazer

Male

Forum Posts : 1156

Location : The Green and Pleasant Land

Registration date : 2009-02-24

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Professor Voodoo on Sat 21 Nov 2009 - 20:50

@Robert Frazer wrote:
Don't worry about it, no problems at all - go right ahead. I've no desire to muzzle people, I'm thick-skinned enough to take a hit without having a tantrum, and I'm not so neurotic that I can't distinguish fiction and drama from the world around me!


That attitude places you on far higher ground than 90% of the loonatic Christians I encounter here in the southern United States. Cheers.


Robert again wrote:...it's like British villains in American cinema .

Wait a minute...I thought all evil Romans in movies were actually Brits. Just watch Spartacus, Ben-Hur, Barabas, Gladiator, all the villians have English accents.
avatar
Professor Voodoo

Male

Forum Posts : 3422

Location : Hudson Valley, New York

Fan of : That one guy who was only in one episode & didn't have any lines.

Original Characters : Marisa/ Elio Alboreto

Comments :

Registration date : 2009-11-10

Back to top Go down

Re: "See Naples and Die": A Short Story

Post by Sponsored content


Sponsored content


Back to top Go down

View previous topic View next topic Back to top


 
Permissions in this forum:
You cannot reply to topics in this forum