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Post by sasahara17 on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 9:13

As some of you may be aware, I am writing a oneshot regarding Claes being given an adult body. It just hit me that, after writing the most horrid piece of prose I have ever put on paper, I need to get some help. I'm not so arrogant to believe there are some things I can't do on my own, so here is my S.O.S. people!

The problem is how Claes would react to having woken up in an adult body. One of the first things I had her do was gawk at her chest... and how I wrote it came out wrong. Felt too, I dunno, sexually offensive. No way am I publishing THAT.

I'm shooting for a T rating this time.

So here I am. Claes wakes up in a twenty five year old body that is buck naked. How does she react? I need to get this out of the way before I can movie into more comfortable territory.

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Post by Kiskaloo on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 9:34

I suppose it would depend on if she knew when she went to sleep that she would be waking up in an adult's body.

If she just went to sleep in her bunk one night and woke up the next morning in a new and adult body I think she'd be thrown for a loop.

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Post by sasahara17 on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 9:44

Naw, she went in for an experiment thinking it was a routine checkup and woke up as an adult.

The whole 'is this my body' is a given, but I want to portray her reaction realistically. I know Treila would scream, Henrietta would faint, Rico would be 'oh, wowie'... but Claes would have a 'restrained panic attack', which is much harder to do.

IMHO Claes would try to fight her panic and attempt to gather information to determine what the hell was going on. However the real questions is how she would go about doing this, and how I should describe her body without being overly explicit.

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Post by Kiskaloo on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 9:53

Well she was 12-years old, ~156cm and flat as a board.

Now she's 25, probably 170cm or so and with a rack like Ferro's?

She'd probably at first think it's some kind of dream.

Where does she wake up? A hospital room? The handler dormitory?

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Post by sasahara17 on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 10:37

Laboratory.

I'll go with the 170cm. And It'll stay that way. NO MORE CHANGES (or my brain will asplode).

The dream thing sounds plausible.

Anybody else interested in giving the two cents?

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Post by Awinnell on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 11:53

she would have trouble standing, her centre of gravity would be much higher up afterwards

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Post by ElfenMagix on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 11:59

@Kiskaloo wrote:I suppose it would depend on if she knew when she went to sleep that she would be waking up in an adult's body.

If she just went to sleep in her bunk one night and woke up the next morning in a new and adult body I think she'd be thrown for a loop.
I would agree with Kisk on both parts.

In Solution's Resolutions, the girls did undergo a rebuilt which aged them approprieately, since S'sR happens about 2011. This would make Claes about 17, Triela 19/20, Henrietta 16ish, etc... but remember, my time line is a bit off, give or take a year or two In this rebuild, the girls knew they were going through the process, so it was not such a shock to them. But it took several days to do, and they precieved it as 1 night since they were unconscious through the whole ordeal. In my universe, this had to be done since the girls were they stuck ages for almost 10 years! This corrects an unfair situation they had to deal with. Also, the handlers were older than in canon.

I'm going to have to draw up who the girls look "grown up", compared to their younger bodies... Evil
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Post by ElfenMagix on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 12:03

@Awinnell wrote:she would have trouble standing, her centre of gravity would be much higher up afterwards
Actually it doesn't. Not ouly would a girl's breasts add weight, her hips and rearend too, and the center of balance changes little. What change there is, girls quickly adopt to them. Only trouble I could see, and again she would quickly adopt to it, is learning how to walk with a wider set of hips, and switching of her rear end which is natural for girls as they grow up.

Only major problem here is Claes wearing jeans and tight skirts and asking Triela if it makes her butt look big.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 12:09

@Kiskaloo wrote:Well she was 12-years old, ~156cm and flat as a board.
Claes was already wearing a bra in V3 or 4 when she was being examined by the doc. And it was not a training bra either, but a very small cup one, so for her age, she was not flat. Comparatively, Henrietta is flat, as is Rico who is closer to her age then Henrietta.

The girls do know something about their bodies and the changes they may be going through. They are not that much in the dark about their development.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 12:13

@sasahara17 wrote:Laboratory.

I'll go with the 170cm. And It'll stay that way. NO MORE CHANGES (or my brain will asplode).
Attack of The 50ft Claes?!!

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Post by Awinnell on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 12:57

the changes to her body would be sudden, whilst under normal circumstances the shift from a straight up and down preadolescent to a triangular shaped adult body are gradual, the sudden gaining of upper mass would be a problem

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Post by ElfenMagix on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 13:35

@Awinnell wrote:the changes to her body would be sudden, whilst under normal circumstances the shift from a straight up and down preadolescent to a triangular shaped adult body are gradual, the sudden gaining of upper mass would be a problem
Actually, it wouldn't. I cite these as examples:
-A person undergoing liposuction- having 8kgs of fat removed from their bellys, go home after the proceedure is completed. They walk out just fine.
-A woman undergoing breast augmentation; with at least 1 cup size increase to a pair of breasts is at least 4kgs. They walk fine during their first waking hours.
-A short person undergoing bone lengthening (a process where leg bones are broken at an angle and regrafted at an offset to give increased height). Once the bones are healed (about 4 weeks), it takes them about an hour to get used to the new height and then function as normal quickly after that.

The Human body and its brain connection is highly adoptable, and makes quick changes to itself when required.

Hell, I known girls to have gone 2 cup sizes overnight, and one girl outgrow her bra during the day- and other than the sudden change, they dont stumble about like clumsy idiots. Growth hormone is a power thing, esp. to a growing body.

The problem would only be insignificant since the body and brain would adjust accordingly in a very short time- less than an hour. I can site how some eyeglass wearers in the forum being switch to a stronger prescription- yes, at first it was something to get used too, but one got used to it very quickly- and often before one leaves the optometrists office.

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Post by sasahara17 on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 18:25

@ElfenMagix wrote:Attack of The 50ft Claes?!!
*Brain explode*

@Awinnell wrote:Awinell's Arguments
@ElfenMagix wrote:Eflen's Arguments

Hm, both of you have vailed points. For the sake hilarity and compromise, I've decided Claes will spend the first few scenes stumbling around trying to get her bearings but due to her experience with new prosthetics and Elfen's arguments she will find eventually find her footing. She won't find her new body comfortable for the rest of the fic, but it's only been a day since she became an adult so that's understanable.

How does that sound?

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Post by Awinnell on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 18:51

works for me , i may have over emphasised the center of gravity thing,should have gone for the proprioception thing instead lol ! Razz

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Post by sasahara17 on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 19:02

Sometimes we talk about the weirdest things ever on this board...

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Post by ElfenMagix on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 20:46

24 hours is more than enough time for Claes to get her bearings.
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Post by sasahara17 on Sat 4 Jul 2009 - 21:22

No she knows. But if she wants to turn back, she won't be able to touch said person. At least until after the reversal. Then Professor Stephanie is in for one heck of a beating.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Mon 6 Jul 2009 - 14:36

By then, Claes would be used too having the new body, and though she might want the old body back, having to go through the proceedure and adjustment period would be a turn off fof her.

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Post by Kiskaloo on Mon 6 Jul 2009 - 15:13

I'm really interested to see how this turns out sasahara17.

I was talking with rusty-spring this morning in chat about how difficult it is to integrate Claes into my OC fratello because she is so much younger than Kara, to say nothing of Michele.

She pretty much can only play the role of his daughter, which limits where he can take her and what she can do.

But if she was rebuilt to say, 18-20 (using the model of Fumi Manjoume from Aoi Hana), she could be a new member of SSIDE and Michele's partner.



And if she suddenly went from about 5cm shorter than Kara to 5cm taller, Claes could than tease Kara about her height and Kara could go all Edward Elric on her for the LOLZ.

It really would solve some issues and would allow me a new ending.


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Post by ElfenMagix on Mon 6 Jul 2009 - 15:32

@Kiskaloo wrote:But if she was rebuilt to say, 20 (using the model of Fumi Manjoume from Aoi Hana), she could be a new member of SSIDE and Michele's partner.
Unfortunately, such a one of such rebuilds happens in Solution's Resolution, and that is in 11/2011. Unless you want to say the hell with it and barrow S'sR Adult Claes and throw her back with aide of a time machine or some other Deus Ex Machina system being used. Evil


@Kiskaloo wrote:And if she suddenly went from about 5cm shorter than Kara to 5cm taller, Claes could than tease Kara about her height and Kara could go all Edward Elric on her for the LOLZ.
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Post by Kiskaloo on Mon 6 Jul 2009 - 15:34

Well they appear to have made Petrushka taller, so I expect they can make Claes taller in 2006.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Mon 6 Jul 2009 - 15:37

@Kiskaloo wrote:Well they appear to have made Petrushka taller, so I expect they can make Claes taller in 2006.
That would make Petrushka taller than Sandro! :lol!:
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Post by emperor on Mon 6 Jul 2009 - 23:45

Some staff will misunderstood that she is one of the handler.

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