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Post by Kiskaloo on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 11:51

@schaschanist wrote:How do you would estimate Emi's age?
I thought that she is (of course) younger than Petra but not older than Claes or Triela.

I'd suggest 11 or 12.

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Post by Schaschanist on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 20:38

Ah, okay. Then she was 12 when she joined the agency.

Where can i post my text i have written from time to time during the last days?
Can i post the complete text in a new thread in the Fan Section under "Fanworks" in "the Library"?
Or what should i do instead of posting the text here directly?

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Post by Professor Voodoo on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 20:49

@schaschanist wrote:Ah, okay. Then she was 12 when she joined the agency.
That's good. On this site there are a lot of teenaged OC's and a few young ones but 12 bridges the gap nicely.
Can i post the complete text in a new thread in the Fan Section under "Fanworks" in "the Library"?
If you want to keep your stories on-site, that would be the place to post them. It works well for shorter chapters.
Or what should i do instead of posting the text here directly?
Or, if you plan to write long chapters/episodes it might be better to get a fanfiction.net account...then provide us a link to your story once you post.

Fanfiction.net can be difficult to deal with; do not hesitate to ask the rest of us on the forum for advice.

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Post by Schaschanist on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 21:07

Thanks Voodoo.

At the age of 12 she is a good bridge between the younger 1st generation and the older 2nd generation cyborgs.
I like the idea that she can be cool with all the girls.
It's a little bit like a kind of Claes but just with a handler or something that way.

I try to post the text i already have but it's not very long (just only chapter one) cause i haven't had much time to write alot the last days.
But thanks for the information.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 21:21

12yrs old is a tricky age as this is where most girls get their periods and all of the sudden, the breast fairy starts throwing jars of Estrogen at them. They can be boy crazy at this age, and competition with other girls (developing what first or how fast) can be stiff. You think boys had it bad, girls can be worse. Its like their sexual awareness goes from 0 to 75% over night and for the next few years try to figure out the rest while they try to figure out how to become swans from ugly ducklings that they are.

As such, 12 may be flexible as to what age group she can fit into, it is they who have to accept her and not her of them. This can be trying for a girl at times. She has a lot of development at this age requires a lot of attention for her needs, both mental and physical. Most (male) Handlers out there will not get pads for his girl, usually sending Ferro, Priscilla, Olga or another cyborg for the task.

Lets see how you do this. I would want to read it. Evil

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Post by Schaschanist on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 21:34

I don't know if most of the cyborgs can have a period.
I thought of it later. Maybe i let her get her period at a later point in the story.

But i know what try to say. Girl in this age from 12 to 15 can be really hard to handle. They are like princesses. Most of them are anarchistic and do whatever they want to. They don't care about what parents are saying or do exactly the opposite.
I know it very well.

But i think our cyborgs a bit different cause of the conditioning.
They are fixed to their handlers.

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Post by Alfisti on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 22:29

@schaschanist wrote:I don't know if most of the cyborgs can have a period.
It's what Triela's having a whinge about in the fourth episode of the anime.

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Post by Schaschanist on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 22:36

I guess. Her tummy was hurting.
Henrietta can not have that, cause she has no uterus.
But whats about the others?
They are cyborgs but they are aging too.


Maybe I take care of that question later in my story.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 23:38

By George, I think he has it!

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Re: Creation of a new OC

Post by Professor Voodoo on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 23:44

But whats about the others?
They are cyborgs but they are aging too.
This question has led to some friendly debate on this forum.

One theory (the one I hold to) is that the girls are locked in at whatever age they were converted. Rico was 11 when she bacame a cyborg, she will be still be 11 years later on the day she dies. If she did not already have her period prior to converstion she never will. Triela was just arriving at that point in her life so she is stuck with a very unpredictable cycle.

The alternate view is that the girls do age in certain ways. I think Elfen can explain that better than I since he is a proponent of that approach.

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Post by Schaschanist on Fri 31 Dec 2010 - 23:55

I think that's fitting to the 1st gens.
But what about the 2nd gens? They are a bit different to the 1st gens.

We should open another thread for that question. this one here is more for things about my OC. Wink

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Post by Kiskaloo on Sat 1 Jan 2011 - 0:02

Kara was sexually active before her conversion, but she was rendered sterile as part of her conversion.

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Re: Creation of a new OC

Post by Schaschanist on Sat 1 Jan 2011 - 19:52

If anyone is interested, I posted my story here:
New Fanfic-Story: "New Ways"

Its just only the beginning but i try to update the story continuously.




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Post by Nachtsider on Sat 1 Jan 2011 - 23:36

@Professor Voodoo wrote:One theory (the one I hold to) is that the girls are locked in at whatever age they were converted. Rico was 11 when she bacame a cyborg, she will be still be 11 years later on the day she dies. If she did not already have her period prior to converstion she never will. Triela was just arriving at that point in her life so she is stuck with a very unpredictable cycle.
I think this is pretty much how it is.

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Post by Tommygunner70 on Sun 2 Jan 2011 - 1:18

Dunno if you've tried it yet but, I find the best way to create OC's and other assorted characters is by running them through a Marry Sue test after being created in order to polish the character.

There are two I use, one complex and one simple.
Simple: http://www.katfeete.net/writing/marysue.php
Complex: http://springhole.net/quizzes/marysue.htm

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Post by ElfenMagix on Sun 2 Jan 2011 - 1:45

My OCs have a major case of Marysue-itis Evil

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Post by Kiskaloo on Sun 2 Jan 2011 - 1:48

Any GSG OC should flirt with being a "Mary Sue" because they are cyborgs and therefore uber-powerful. They also should be attractive, which raises the score a good bit.

Kara scores a 38 on the "complex test" which is definite Mary Sue and in need of immediate re-work, but I'm okay with her being a Mary Sue and based on the reviews, so is the audience. Smile

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Post by Tommygunner70 on Sun 2 Jan 2011 - 2:02

well I usually ignore the super strength ticker on the complex test. seeing as the super strength is a universal perk of being a Cyborg. as for the attractiveness ticker, I also ignore that because there isn't a Single Fugly or average looking Cyborg yet.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Sun 2 Jan 2011 - 2:24

@Kiskaloo wrote:Kara scores a 38 on the "complex test" which is definite Mary Sue and in need of immediate re-work...
ROTFL 315 ROTFL

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Post by Danjo3 on Sun 2 Jan 2011 - 3:49

If you’re not a chick, chicks can be tricky to write. Since most of the writers here are male, I often notice that their female OC’s sometimes have more masculine qualities then feminine. While it’s true they kick some serious ass on the job, when off the clock they’re regular adolescent girls – it’s one of the things that make the story so unique. As difficult as it is, you have to more or less put yourself in a 12 year old girls shoes.

Not to sound like I’m shamelessly plugging Britney, but I try to keep her as girly as possible – favorite color is pink, loves to be spoiled by males (among other things), and is a slave to the latest fashions. She even adores scented bubble baths and gabbing for hours on the phone about absolutely nothing. Oh, and if during training she were to break her arm it wouldn’t bother her too much, but watch and see what happens if she were to break a nail.

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Post by Schaschanist on Sun 2 Jan 2011 - 18:11

I decided to make Emilie the last 1st generation cyborg ever built.
The 'latest evolution stage' of the 1st gens.
Same structure as the 1st gens but the modernest technicals and a bit less armored.
Call it: 'The Last Try'

She's an expert in covert operation and infiltration.
In that way she have to be strong enough to open doors with bare hands or to win every fight with Padanians.
For that work she needs EVERY advantage of he 1st gens.
I don't think that the 2nd gens have the power for that.
And of course, for special work you need a special tool or a specified warrior.
So i thought, it would be more logical to make her the last stage of 1st gens.


AND it's because i don't like the idea of the significant weaker 2nd gens as much as other.
My opinion is that the 2nd gens are not so interesting as the 'real' gunslinger girls like Triela, Henrietta or Rico.
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Post by Professor Voodoo on Sun 2 Jan 2011 - 20:16

@Danjo3 wrote:Not to sound like I’m shamelessly plugging Britney, but I try to keep her as girly as possible – favorite color is pink, loves to be spoiled by males (among other things), and is a slave to the latest fashions. She even adores scented bubble baths and gabbing for hours on the phone about absolutely nothing.
All these elements are appreciated by your audience.
There is however a limit...

Random Cyborg: The tutu hides my pistol...the purple flashlight is really an infrared target spotter...the sunglasses have a receiver that conveys information from field command...and the binoculars are, ummm...they're camouflaged!

Random Handler: (faceplam) You are not going out on a mission like that.

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Post by Alfisti on Sun 2 Jan 2011 - 21:39

@schaschanist wrote:Same structure as the 1st gens but the modernest technicals and a bit less armored.
Call it: 'The Last Try'
This is a similar approach to what I originally took with Monty, integrating Gen1 components with Gen2 conditioning. I've since changed it as it really was not justified for the role Monty fills, being more focused on long-range information gathering and espionage than combat. Put simply; she needs her systems to last a long time, be reliable and not set off airport metal detectors more than she requires the ability to push a man's head through three layers of brick. Wink

In the case of Emilie though I think the hybrid construction makes sense.

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Post by Danjo3 on Mon 3 Jan 2011 - 7:41

@Professor Voodoo wrote:There is however a limit...
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Post by Schaschanist on Mon 3 Jan 2011 - 13:46

@Alfisti wrote:
In the case of Emilie though I think the hybrid construction makes sense.
Thanks for your comfirmation.

I think it's better to build a cyborg after deciding it's kind of work / area of application.
Makes more sense than building a 2nd gen in general and decide the usage.
So you've got the possibility to build a modified 1st gen (field and special usages) or a standard 2nd gen (civil).

Otherwise you have a cyborg that is ridiculous unusable e.g. for heavy operations.
This would be the worst case scenario / supergau. No Good
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Post by Officer_Charon on Mon 3 Jan 2011 - 17:28

@Danjo3 wrote:
@Professor Voodoo wrote:There is however a limit...
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It’s never too soon for a girl to start her training. Razz

Heh, just wait till my daughter gets old enough... I had BETTER have an AR platform my that point... now, my WIFE may $#!+ bricks, but we'll burn that bridge when we get there. *grins*


@schaschanist: Everything here looks like a well-thought out concept, and seeing what you're doing with your fic shows promise. Look forward to seeing more!

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Post by Schaschanist on Mon 3 Jan 2011 - 17:48

@Officer_Charon wrote:
@schaschanist: Everything here looks like a well-thought out concept, and seeing what you're doing with your fic shows promise. Look forward to seeing more!

Thanks, Charon.
I am still working on it, but haven't got the time i want to have.
Im just to busy, cause i am active in around ten other forums (most of the about bikes like my own one). sweat
I try do build up a logical story, that make sense.

And i want to quote myself cause i think this is a nice little text (from another threat):
@schaschanist wrote:Emilie is a enhanced human being with erased memories (only Etienne knows her past).
She needs to eat, go to toilet and sleep and has her own quirks .
In a later point of my story, she gets the truth about her being and begins to worry about her life at the agency and cries and Etienne tries to solace her.
They have a very special relationship. He knows her since she was a baby cause she is the daughter of Etienne's best childhhood friend. She is like a daughter for him, cause he had seen her growing up.
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Post by Schaschanist on Wed 5 Jan 2011 - 13:45

Hey Folks,

I was thinking about Emilie, her relationship with Etienne and her emotions.

Emilie is' the last try' of a 1st generation cyborg but with the latest update.
The conditioning she is receiving is a brand new type. It works better and is reducing the stress for the brain and the body at all. So the lifespan is explicitly longer than the lifespan of a 1st gen (maybe same as 2nd gen or maybe longer. I have to think about that again...)
The memories are completely away, same as for all 'cyborgisations' of 1st and 2nd gens.
Her loyalty is absolutely, but without this strong feeling of 'love' for her handler.
She doesn't 'love' her handler like Henrietta or Petra did both in her own ways.
It's more like the feeling you have for a father (remember he was the childhood friend of Emi's father so for him she is like a daughter).

Her feeling aren't as strong as the other cyborgs feelings. So at one Point in her (cyborg-)life where she saw other cyborgs dieing in action she begins to worry about herself and the whole swa-thing.
At the same point Etienne kicked Jean's ass (and smashed his face) for the comment, that the girls are just 'replaceable things'.


This is what i already have in my mind so far.
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Post by Professor Voodoo on Fri 7 Jan 2011 - 3:26

I think this early concept drawing of Petrushka could decently pass for Emilie...

...needs a bow on the side of her beret though.

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Post by Schaschanist on Fri 7 Jan 2011 - 4:51

Please, if you (or others) have more pictures of the early Petroushka, post it or send it to me.
I don't have anything about her.

That will help me for my Emilie.

Btw: Later i post the latest picture of her that i have done.


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Post by Schaschanist on Fri 7 Jan 2011 - 11:26

Hey There,

Here are my new pictures of her.
First Version:
not finished, later edited

Second Version

I have redrawn it now in another bigger scale with thinner lines and added the FN Five-Seven, her first secondary weapon.

@Voodoo,
You're right, the old Petrushka looks a bit similar to Emilie. With a bit fantasy it's Emilie in her younger Years in the agency.
Think it a bit more curvier and you have the older Emilie (I let her grow up a little bit in my story, mentally matured and physically more like a teenager).
But Please, if you have some pictures of the old Petrushka, please post it or send it to me via email.


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Post by Alfisti on Fri 7 Jan 2011 - 12:22



That's the only other pic of the "old" Petra that I've found...

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Post by Jacen Starslayer on Fri 7 Jan 2011 - 15:44

Nice.

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Post by Professor Voodoo on Fri 7 Jan 2011 - 23:19

Here's the only other pre-Petra pictures I have...they're actually from a comedy-hentai doujin.




Alas...no red bow on her beret.

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Post by Schaschanist on Sat 8 Jan 2011 - 6:04

@Professor Voodoo wrote:Here's the only other pre-Petra pictures I have...they're actually from a comedy-hentai doujin.

Thanks, but i think it's too sexy and too grown up for Emilie. Razz



By the way,
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It's showing her at the funeral of the cyborgs that were killed in action in my story.
She looks sad cause the death touched her deeply.
The clothes are darker than normal. I added another baret with the same bow and a handbag, made the skirt longer and the socks higher.

And i want to add: she is wearing black or grey-tones most of the time.

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Post by Schaschanist on Sat 8 Jan 2011 - 22:37


Cause it looks a bit like Emi, i tried to redraw this picture.

This is the finished Version:

The gun is a B+T MP9 attached with a silencer, red dot and a tactical sight.
(And i made her just a little bit taller again. She's as tall as Triela now.)
This picture shows her on a bodyguard-mission where she had to protect a high-class politician and his daughter.


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Post by Professor Voodoo on Sun 9 Jan 2011 - 0:54

It's fun watching your character develop visually. You changed the beret a little for the last two drawings, but kept the ribbon (which I think is a nice touch).

Is it (the bow) something important to her; a gift from her handler or one of her cyborg friends (perhaps the one who died?)...or does Emi have a whole drawer full of them?

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Post by Schaschanist on Sun 9 Jan 2011 - 5:17

Hmm, i didn't thought about that so far...
I try to find a reason for it:

The barets are something from her life before but these new barets are gifts from Etienne.
It was (and still is) one of her fancies from her earlier life, so Etienne, who already knows her since earliest childhood, gave her some barets and some other stuff from her life before to keep a part of the 'old' Emilie alive.
The Conditioning has erased most of her memories, but some things, manners, fancies and so are still there.

And the bow ... it was a gift from one of the girls on her first days, so it's something special for her to attach it on every baret she is wearing.

But since her first day at the agency, Emi sometimes is doing things independently for her own (without asking). She is absolute loyal to Etienne but she's not such a obediently one at all as the others.
And the agency has to live with that.... cause this is a side-effect of the new kind of conditioning. (Remember: Emilie is a test-object for that 'new' conditioning)

I think this is a bit strange and not fitting to the canon, but i decided something special for her very unique role in my OC-Story.
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Post by Schaschanist on Sun 9 Jan 2011 - 14:40

Cause i haven't set it yet, i just want to set Emi's height right now.
@Kiskaloo wrote:
Yu created a chart for all of the GSG characters:

Henrietta = 140 cm (4'7")
Angelica = 147 cm (4'9")
Rico = 153 cm (5'0")
Claes = 158 cm (5'2")
Petrushka = 160 cm (5’3”)
Triela = 164 cm (5'4")

In my mind she should be just somewhere between Claes and Triela, so somewhere between 158cm and 164cm.

But i would say, she is around 1,57cm tall. Not as tall as Triela, but near to Claes and more than the younger girls.
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Post by Kiskaloo on Sun 9 Jan 2011 - 14:53

Kara's height is 168cm, while Michele is 185cm.

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Post by Schaschanist on Sun 9 Jan 2011 - 15:19

Hmm,
Etienne's height? ... around 1,77m....
More a 'shorty' in comparison to the other handlers.
That's why the call him 'Van Damme'.

But i think this is a bit better for his work.
Makes him a bit more agile in a hand-to-hand fight.

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Post by tremec6speed on Tue 11 Jan 2011 - 4:15

Cool characters! Between the great art and the developing story, can't wait to see see how it all evolves. cheers
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Actually i sketching text-parts all over the complete storyline. everything that comes in my mind and even if it appears randomly.
I had to write them down and put them into the right time order. If i had done this, i have to fill the gaps between all thoughts and ideas with a story or conversations.

At the moment i'm sitting on 2 chapters at the same time, both not completed. And the third or fourth are just in progress.
So it can take a while to get any result.
But i am working constantly on it.

And if i have new ideas for her look or just want to change a detail, this is more important. and have to be done in first line.

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Post by Schaschanist on Wed 12 Jan 2011 - 20:32

Latest Version.


I made her a bit taller again, now i think she fits her 1,57m better.. (more balanced at all)
And i also changed the nose, the fingers and the beret a little bit.

Now I think the proportions and the details are perfect and really well-balanced.

Actually I am writing on my OC-Story and changed the chapter style a little bit.
But now i have three or four unfinished chapters.... sweat
However, i am still working constantly on it.


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Post by Schaschanist on Wed 19 Jan 2011 - 14:12

Hi Folks.
Last Sunday I was on a classical concert in Rome.
Unbelievable who i saw there.
Emilie and Etienne.
He was completely bored the whole concert, but Emilie was happy and freaked out totally as they played "La Campanella" by Franz Liszt.


Most people, Etienne too, don't know Emile had Piano and Singing Lessons in her childhood.
And she didn't remember any of her Talents till one day she entered the music-room and began to play the Piano and start singing there.
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Post by Professor Voodoo on Wed 19 Jan 2011 - 17:21

@schaschanist wrote:Unbelievable who i saw there.
Emilie and Etienne.
He was completely bored the whole concert, but Emilie was happy and freaked out totally as they played "La Campanella" by Franz Liszt.

Most people, Etienne too, don't know Emile had Piano and Singing Lessons in her childhood.
Very good detail for an upcoming chapter of your story!

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Post by Schaschanist on Wed 19 Jan 2011 - 17:43

Thanks, Voodoo.
I will use this. I think maybe that could be a important part for the story (or at least this chapter).

At the moment i try to write some storyline and dialogs.
But now i do it in German, this way it 's easier and not that complicated.
(English is not my native language...)

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Post by Kiskaloo on Wed 19 Jan 2011 - 18:26

Kara plays the piano (good) and the violin (fair-to-middlin). I figure she's not much on opera, so Michele and Claes would be the ones to slip out to a performance at La Scala.

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Post by Schaschanist on Thu 20 Jan 2011 - 6:00

Unfortunally i don't know anything about the musical talents of the other cyborged SWA-Girls.
I only know Henrietta plays the Violin.

I want to know more about that, maybe this could be an interesting part of my story (or at least one chapter).

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Post by Nachtsider on Thu 20 Jan 2011 - 6:32

Claes plays the piano. For what it's worth, there's some promo art showing Elsa playing the flute.

I like to think that Triela can rock an electric guitar like nobody's business.

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Post by MP5 on Thu 20 Jan 2011 - 7:45

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I like to think that Triela can rock an electric guitar like nobody's business.

Hm... If I could draw, I would take this as a cue to put up a pic of Triela dressed as Slash having a rock-off with Allison dressed as Eddie Van Halen.

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Post by Schaschanist on Thu 20 Jan 2011 - 8:03

Claes at the piano? Is it somewhere shown in the manga?

If yes, then I like the idea of Emi and Claes playing piano while Emi is singing to the melody.


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Post by Kiskaloo on Thu 20 Jan 2011 - 8:06

@schaschanist wrote:Claes at the piano? Is it somewhere shown in the manga?

Both the manga and in the second anime series.

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Post by Schaschanist on Thu 20 Jan 2011 - 8:14

Really? Which chapter in the manga?

I want to see that with my own eyes.

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Here is the picture. It bottom-right. You see that? Sorry, I don't know where is the manga chapter is.

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Post by Kiskaloo on Thu 20 Jan 2011 - 8:18

@schaschanist wrote:Really? Which chapter in the manga?

Chapter 18: "Tiny Joy, Tearless Grief"

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Post by Alfisti on Thu 20 Jan 2011 - 9:46

@schaschanist wrote:Hi Folks.
Last Sunday I was on a classical concert in Rome.
Unbelievable who i saw there.
Emilie and Etienne.
He was completely bored the whole concert, but Emilie was happy and freaked out totally as they played "La Campanella" by Franz Liszt.
A reward for a job well done?

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Post by Schaschanist on Thu 20 Jan 2011 - 13:44

Hmm,
Maybe a reward for work or maybe just for fun.
He never gets bad, he's always trying to keep her happy.

Emilie loves classical music, so Etienne decided to visit the opera, even if it's absolutely nothing for him.

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Post by Schaschanist on Sun 30 Jan 2011 - 16:13

Hey Folks,

Unfortunately I wrote down some chapters or parts of chapters or some concepts without any translation.

But I have written down a (yet untranslated) chapter i called 'revelation'.
So far: Emilie was hurt heavily by protecting Etienne against a bomb explosion. As result for the near to death experience and Etienne's reward for that action, she asked for their history and relationship and Etienne told her the reason why he had chosen her as his cyborg girl.
And she said a deep from heart coming "I love you" for the very first time to her Handler.


And i thought about the idea to introduce new OCs (not sure if only a new cyborg alone or a new fratello) for my story.
But i'm not sure about that.
I have to think about the basics of the characters (look, history, nationality, ...) or the relation to my existing OCs.
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