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The Shape

Post by Nagneto on Sun 11 Sep 2011 - 2:27

A reviewer suggested in a PM to post this here on this site. I'm not wholly satisfied with it and I will be doing edits on it. I would like some constructive criticism on it. It's supposed to get scary, but I think it comes a little to close to...well I don't want to spoil it Razz . I should mention I had a hell of a lot of fun writing it this way, maybe I'm being too analytical.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7115351/1/The_Shape


The music from the album (specifically this one) inspired the whole thing

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ujqe9XZJZkQ&NR=1

^ That one specifically inspired The Shape's "dance".

Also just for fun, anyone that wants a challenge their drawing skill. I can't draw for shit. Somebody draw the Shape when it's in it's Elk/Dryad form.

(also, the whole "I live out of my car" thing in the intro was intended as joke. It's stupid and is one of the things I'm changing).


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When logic and proportion
Have fallen sloppy dead
And the White Knight is talking backwards
And the Red Queen's "off with her head!"
Remember what the dormouse said:
FEED YOUR HEAD

White Rabbit by Jefferson Airplane
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Re: The Shape

Post by Nagneto on Sun 11 Sep 2011 - 2:35



Found it at random. Couldn't find anything that exactly matched my vision.

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When logic and proportion
Have fallen sloppy dead
And the White Knight is talking backwards
And the Red Queen's "off with her head!"
Remember what the dormouse said:
FEED YOUR HEAD

White Rabbit by Jefferson Airplane
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Comments : Sunshine in the house of flames
She loves it where she gets it
But it's never felt the same
Surgery, in the house of dissection
When your candle burns out I'll resurrect you
She runs through fields of daisies
Yeah, it's just a shame that they eat their own babies
Who cares, cos' the air is free
When you get there will you kiss the dead for me?

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Re: The Shape

Post by Odon on Mon 12 Sep 2011 - 0:04

@Nagneto wrote: Couldn't find anything that exactly matched my vision.

How about this image here. It seems to fit the story.

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Re: The Shape

Post by Nagneto on Tue 13 Sep 2011 - 7:28

LOL!

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When logic and proportion
Have fallen sloppy dead
And the White Knight is talking backwards
And the Red Queen's "off with her head!"
Remember what the dormouse said:
FEED YOUR HEAD

White Rabbit by Jefferson Airplane
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Nagneto

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Forum Posts : 62

Location : Campbell Country

Fan of : Primordial Evil That Has Ruled Before

Original Characters : Sylvester Von Braun

Comments : Sunshine in the house of flames
She loves it where she gets it
But it's never felt the same
Surgery, in the house of dissection
When your candle burns out I'll resurrect you
She runs through fields of daisies
Yeah, it's just a shame that they eat their own babies
Who cares, cos' the air is free
When you get there will you kiss the dead for me?

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