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Post by Odon on Mon 2 Jul 2012 - 9:23

Caught between missions
My window-shopping fratella
Sighs over dresses and kitsch souvenirs
Pretty as a cyborg doll
The radiance of that conditioned smile
When she looks upon the face of (God?)
This burnt-out discard
Of other mens' politics
Was once as stupid as yourself
With none of the excuses.

Frozen in the moment
Between hammer fall and cartridge ignition
Between your voided past
And our violent death
You believe we spent a lifetime together
Father daughter
Brother sister
(Lover?)
Your love is in the pills
I place into your trusting palm.



Poem cited in "Report by the Guellfi Inquiry into Allegations Regarding the Social Welfare Agency."  Author unknown.


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Re: More free verse

Post by tremec6speed on Mon 2 Jul 2012 - 16:26

words fail me so: head bang
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Post by Odon on Mon 2 Jul 2012 - 20:15

@tremec6speed wrote:words fail me so:

Sighedolga...

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Post by Thescarredman on Mon 2 Jul 2012 - 20:40

So this is what you've been up to. The completed work is going to be awe-inspiring, Odon.
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Post by Alfisti on Tue 3 Jul 2012 - 6:24

Even better for formatting and a read through Wink

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Post by Alfisti on Tue 3 Jul 2012 - 6:27

And another thing.

@Thescarredman wrote:So this is what you've been up to. The completed work is going to be awe-inspiring, Odon.
Is that Comic Sans... wow, I do NOT know you...

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Post by Odon on Tue 3 Jul 2012 - 8:34

@Alfisti wrote:Even better for formatting and a read through Wink



Speaking of formatting, why does it go all over the place
whenever I cut and paste from Microsoft Word?

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Post by Kiskaloo on Tue 3 Jul 2012 - 10:08

I notice the same. Not sure why it happens.

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Post by Alfisti on Tue 3 Jul 2012 - 17:12

@Odon wrote:
@Alfisti wrote:Even better for formatting and a read through Wink

Speaking of formatting, why does it go all over the place
whenever I cut and paste from Microsoft Word?
No idea mate... I'm going to hazard a guess though and say something in how word stores formatting doesn't interface well with the forum. I find if you copy and paste into a .txt editor first (say, notepad) it gets rid of any of that and seems to solve the problem. Of course, that also means that if you've used bold or italics anywhere you'll have to put them back manually.

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Post by Thescarredman on Tue 3 Jul 2012 - 17:30

@Alfisti wrote:And another thing.

@Thescarredman wrote:So this is what you've been up to. The completed work is going to be awe-inspiring, Odon.
Is that Comic Sans... wow, I do NOT know you...

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Post by Kiskaloo on Tue 3 Jul 2012 - 19:47


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Post by tremec6speed on Wed 4 Jul 2012 - 0:28

@Odon wrote:
@tremec6speed wrote:words fail me so:

Sighedolga...

gesundheit!
Razz
Seriously though, great work.
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