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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Fri 27 Jul 2012 - 3:13

Gunslinger girl The other side
my first fanfiction featuring Yuki and Petrushka in my intro to the series.....

there will be larger battle than the final assault before(a hint, it has to do with the state iowa and code 61)

i will(later)introduce 7 cyborg from 3 country(it's a secret.....)
maybe an engagement in somalia...(if i remember it.....a scenario is build...i just need an execution command...)


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Post by Professor Voodoo on Fri 27 Jul 2012 - 14:18

Nice introduction...a peaceful scene at the compound involving all the remaining canon characters. You're doing a good job at using dialogue & narrative text to describe what the characters are doing and create a scene that your reader can see in his/her head.

While the English was not 100% perfect I found it easy to understand...well done. I hope to see more.


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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Fri 27 Jul 2012 - 16:52

@Professor Voodoo wrote:Nice introduction...a peaceful scene at the compound involving all the remaining canon characters. You're doing a good job at using dialogue & narrative text to describe what the characters are doing and create a scene that your reader can see in his/her head.

While the English was not 100% perfect I found it easy to understand...well done. I hope to see more.


thanks Professor voodoo....
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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Sun 29 Jul 2012 - 1:57

in just 4 day's i've manage to add 3 chapter

gunslinger girl the other side chapter 3
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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Fri 10 Aug 2012 - 10:49

it's already chapter eight in just 2 weeks...(meh only small amount of work i done..)
Chapter 8 is available now...
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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Sat 18 Aug 2012 - 3:34

i have to postpone the fanfic, i'm celebrating Aidil fitri( eidul fitr) with my family at my village....
soon, two days from now, i'll complete the thirteen chapter....for now, i'm enjoying myself at my village...
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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Thu 1 Nov 2012 - 6:30

looks like my STPM ( High certificate of Malaysian Studies) exam will make my Fanfiction stalled for a while; for as long as 2 1/2 week...... rest assure, i will make sure that i'll try my best updating it n_n
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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Thu 17 Jan 2013 - 14:39

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8357655/54/Gunslinger-girl-The-other-side

only 5 chapter left for this story before the ending... the final chapter will be written as: Part 60-EPILOGUE-START OF THE FOUR CYCLE
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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Mon 28 Jan 2013 - 4:22

ending the story, here's part 60: EPILOGUE-THE CYCLE OF FOUR SEASONS
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