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Shino's FF collection

Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Mon 22 Sep 2014 - 20:07

So i decide that i should create my own post for all of my future FF story...  for a starter... here's my current and latest story.

Gunslinger girl -solstice-
plot:
Approximately 2 years after the New Trino incident, peace has been restored in Italy. Despite their defeat in the New trino battle and the government is under the new Administration, the Padanian; still backed by the FRF still threatening the community with terrorism activity. The story set place in Festa della Repubblica, the end of the beginning that will soon unfold more chaos.

Arc 1: Sonata of Summer
Arc 2: Bastion
Arc 3: In our Guns we trust
Arc 4: Phantasma Il Teatrino
Arc 5: Silence of a wolf

Note: any opinion, comment, feedback, or suggestion can be dropped here to improve my story Very Happy


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Post by crazyidiot78 on Tue 23 Sep 2014 - 6:13

Seeing as I didn't read your other story first there were a few bits that I had trouble with, mainly the vacation in Venice part didn't make sense to me.  Second I had trouble reading it as it seemed like you were stuck between first and third person with the tenses.  However the plot ideas you have already look good.  Using the cyborg as a decoy makes perfect sense, ad the bit about working through distractions was nice.  Not the way I would have thought of doing it but nice.  Oh and Felicia being a jerk will add some interesting dynamics.  She might just learn why you don't piss off people who can turn you into a human pretzel.
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Re: Shino's FF collection

Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Wed 1 Oct 2014 - 19:03

Second chapter is up

@crazyidiot78 wrote:Seeing as I didn't read your other story first there were a few bits that I had trouble with, mainly the vacation in Venice part didn't make sense to me.  Second I had trouble reading it as it seemed like you were stuck between first and third person with the tenses.  However the plot ideas you have already look good.  Using the cyborg as a decoy makes perfect sense, ad the bit about working through distractions was nice.  Not the way I would have thought of doing it but nice.  Oh and Felicia being a jerk will add some interesting dynamics.  She might just learn why you don't piss off people who can turn you into a human pretzel.

Well... the Venice part is just a fillup for the plot Razz
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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Tue 7 Oct 2014 - 7:27

So chapter 3 is finished

i'll be waiting for any comment/feedback from you guys Razz
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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Mon 13 Oct 2014 - 9:56

Chapter 4 is up
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Post by Kurosaka "Ery" Erika on Tue 4 Nov 2014 - 19:05

and with much delay, chapter 5 is finished
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