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Post by Whatface on Sun 14 Sep 2008 - 9:46

and I bet college or uni isn't any different DX
That depends on the course/subjects that your doing.

Last semester for me was awesome. My buddy had heaps of exams cause he was doing some science course. But I didn't even have a single exam. I got tons of assignments though, but most of them I didn't mind because they were subjects that I enjoyed. This semester though... ERG! I hate the subjects!

Uni is more "free" I guess. No one really forces you to study or attend lectures, but that's you're problem if you stuff up. No one cares if you play games on your laptop or DS during a lecture. Plus, you only need to go if you have a class on the day. I currently have a 3 and a half day weekend Razz . There are tons of assignments and exams with little or no time in between though...

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Post by Guest on Wed 24 Sep 2008 - 14:28

Alright, some edit I've done so far.

Aside from giving hints on who's OC I'm pulling out of the story, who's making cameo-roles and what else, I've recently added some extra stuff in Chapter 8. One of which is Muffin's line to make her more serious. Another is more of a 'romance development' between Triela and Roland just to show how 'long' has it been going.

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Post by Guest on Wed 1 Oct 2008 - 1:54

OK, now that it took a little too long for update...


but anyway, here we are! Next chapter, prepare for the OC vs OC battle!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4247663/13/The_Detectives_Daughter

Oh! And if its not too bothersome, review in FF.net!! ^^v

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Post by Whatface on Wed 1 Oct 2008 - 2:39

rolls out with her saliva.
Yuck! Yuck!

*pictures soggy soggy chips*

Thats a bit gross!

Get rid of the saliva part and just say crumbs rolled out or something. Other than that, great!


But shouldn't you be updating the older chapters first??

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Post by Guest on Wed 1 Oct 2008 - 11:52

I know, I should^^;

I'll get to editing *again* and see what I can do :p

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Post by Guest on Wed 29 Oct 2008 - 11:13

Finally after 2 weeks or so chapter 13 is done!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4247663/14/The_Detectives_Daughter

Now that I figured things around on what can and what cannot, I managed to add a 'break' for paragraphs v^^v

Next issue will involve the fight between Muffin and Triela so don't miss out! Very Happy

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Post by Whatface on Wed 29 Oct 2008 - 19:58

I still think you should fix up the previous chapters first.

I'll reply to your PM later. Gotta catch up on my gaming Razz


But as a quick fix. Instead of Muffin doing this:
“Ok, ok I get it!” Muffin shoves the barrel away. “Just don’t aim that thing around here—or at me!”

I would like for her to cock her G36C loudly in his face. As if to say, 'this is German engineered too!'

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Post by Guest on Mon 3 Nov 2008 - 12:01

Alright, done and done!

Finally after sparing some time I finished editing all the chapters as well as adding line breaks!


I would like for her to cock her G36C loudly in his face. As if to say, 'this is German engineered too!'

Don't worry! That too is done Very Happy

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Post by Whatface on Mon 3 Nov 2008 - 21:07

Panzer IV wrote:Alright, done and done!

Finally after sparing some time I finished editing all the chapters as well as adding line breaks!
But Mina and stuff are still there. I thought you were going to cut them?

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Post by Guest on Tue 4 Nov 2008 - 1:14

They are cut/out. I've mentioned in chapter...8-7 that the Agency decided to pull some of their ops. out of the operation. They will still make minor cameo roles though...

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Post by Whatface on Tue 4 Nov 2008 - 1:26

Ah. Didn't see

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Post by Guest on Sun 16 Nov 2008 - 6:31

This might be a slight dissapointment to some but...

Next chapter will be on hold for a time.

I have exams tomorrow for the entire week and I am not messing with it. I'll be passing that and so...yeah. I'll finish it when time gives me during the week

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Post by ElfenMagix on Sun 16 Nov 2008 - 22:46

Exams are more important. Deal with them first and get a good grade.
I too am doing the college thing, and due to exams, things are on hold until then.

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Post by Guest on Thu 25 Dec 2008 - 13:54

I'll write this quick and simple. I'm rather irk to have to write this again and again.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4247663/15/The_Detectives_Daughter

Chapter 14: Waltz, ladies and gentlemen. Muffin vs. Triela.

Next chapter:

Chapter 15: Friends pt. 1 (Muffin vs. Rachel)


If there are any changes need to be maid, PM or email me. Best yet, leave a review Laughing. I'll check them if I can get my internet back working Very Happy

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Re: Panzer IV's fanfics.

Post by Whatface on Thu 25 Dec 2008 - 22:19

Wow. After taking a break from my OC, I can see that Muffin is a bitch.

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Post by Kiskaloo on Thu 25 Dec 2008 - 22:30

Time to send her to Reform School...

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Post by Whatface on Thu 25 Dec 2008 - 22:32

and time for me to send Panzer a PM

There's no emotion to this fight. The flashbacks are there, but the fight is just them two slugging it out and Muffin bitching.

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Post by Guest on Sun 1 Feb 2009 - 10:22

Well, sparing some time for this wouldn't hurt now would it?

Ladies and Gentlemen, I present you The Detective's Daughter latest chapter!

Chapter 15: Friends (Rachel F. & Muffin W.)

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4247663/16/The_Detectives_Daughter

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Post by Whatface on Sun 1 Feb 2009 - 21:23

I told you to shoot her in the god damn chest or at least have something pin her to the ground.

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Post by Guest on Mon 2 Feb 2009 - 9:21

There are a few reason I decided to drop the idea of shooting her in the chest:

1. To show that Rachel, despite the pressure, could not--and will not--take out/Kill Muffin. Shooting someone in the chest meant that you show this intention of killing someone. She doesn't want that. That's why she chose to shoot her in the leg in the means of disabling her. She could, of all cases, aim for a headshot--which she is trained for--if she's vying for a kill.

2. I don't want Muffin to be TOO injured that she won't be able to stand for next encounter. I mean, you don't have time to go back to the Agency, get the bullet out, then get back to fight again. Besides, I kinda' think Muffin walking up in the next duel with a red-tinted white bandage on her right leg seems pretty cool rather than a bandage over her shoulder down or around her waist or chest.

3. Taking note of having to be crushed by something, I could not think of anything to crush her with. The basketball ring? I don't think so. If she can't move it, she can't continue and do note that NO ONE will come to tend her when they're all occupied with the main objective. If she can move it away, Muffin must be hella' strong. How are you supposed to get her crushed by something when they're outside? A tree? A bullet would not pierce her.

I doubt the idea of shooting her leg would stop her momentarily and thought about having Rachel use her bayonet to stab her in the chest. But that would mean she showed an intention to kill, but no. I'm portraying to have her hesitate and show that she still believe of their friendship implicitly.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Mon 2 Feb 2009 - 19:15

For Rachel's character, this would be right. She was ordered to protect Triela and stop any SWA team that was on Triela's tail. This does not mean to kill them. As Panzer stated- if Rachel wanted Muffin dead- she would have gone for a head shot. That is what she is trained for- killing the enemy. Muffin was not the enemy.

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Post by Whatface on Mon 2 Feb 2009 - 20:59

Oh ok, I see now. You could have explained it to me earlier -.-

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Re: Panzer IV's fanfics.

Post by Guest on Sun 3 May 2009 - 14:25

This will be the last time I'll throw my 10 yen coins. Afterwards, its all exams for me.

My last contribution, to show that I'm not literally DEAD in BOOKS.

here it is:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4247663/17/The_Detectives_Daughter

Colo-sen, if you're reading this, please leave a review or at least PM me. Tell me if I did Luke right...and Ehud. I kinda' fear he's rather OOC...

...although I personally think he looks cool in the chapter Laughing


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Post by West Nile on Sun 3 May 2009 - 23:40

Where's my Sophy? Cry

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Post by Guest on Tue 5 May 2009 - 11:35

Sophie will be there later, don't worry.

I can't right much now with exams going on here and there.

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Post by Guest on Sat 20 Jun 2009 - 11:16

About time, really. I never had that much time left after High School...why am I not surprised? I'll post everything here anyway.

So here it is, the next chapter

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4247663/18/The_Detectives_Daughter

Took me some time to actually finish this chapter with some small attempts of combining Krav Maga and all the likes to which Luke has control of. I tried giving a more detailed action in the movement.
Then there's the time when I went to Singapore just earlier this week to attend a historical seminar in NUS with some members of my history class, just for the fun and knowledge of it.

Its been confirmed now. I wont' be leaving to MelU with Risa-tan on the 2nd of July. I haven't receive my 'acceptance' letter and I heavily rely on my IB grade which is coming in...July. Instead, I'll be going to the States--Seattle--to GreenRiver Community College in August. If I receive the acceptance letter, then I'll be going to MelU (Australia, Melbourne) on January-February. I just pray that my grade suffice.

that's all. I still have some papers to take care of now and the need to find some books to return to school

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Post by Nachtsider on Sun 21 Jun 2009 - 1:50

Panzer IV wrote:If I receive the acceptance letter, then I'll be going to MelU (Australia, Melbourne) on January-February. I just pray that my grade suffice.
Red Baron gonna be gunnin' for ya, Snoopy.

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Post by boomer_gonz on Sun 21 Jun 2009 - 6:18

Better prop that Sopwith Camel and fly.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Sun 21 Jun 2009 - 14:58

Evil Out of Manfred's last 15 Victories, 9 were Sopwith Camels...

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Post by Guest on Mon 2 Nov 2009 - 17:26

Who said this story is dead? This is the longest chapter so far.

http://login.fanfiction.net/story/story_preview.php?storyid=4247663&chapter=19/

my editor convinced me to keep writing. I'll have to thank him for that.

Any edits, character inaccuracies, or requests on changes, leave a review and I'll get it done.

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Post by ElfenMagix on Mon 2 Nov 2009 - 18:36

Panzer- check that URL. It does not look right.

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Post by Guest on Thu 24 Dec 2009 - 21:59

Will be posting a Christmas Special 'Omake' for 'The Detective's Daughter' soon.

...well, entirely unrelated with the current story but...yeah, it'll be there to lighten the tension. Smile

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Post by Guest on Fri 25 Dec 2009 - 5:36

...and so here it is. Christmas Special chapter:

R&R. Kinda' morbid for an ending actually...

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4247663/20/The_Detectives_Daughter

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